also agree it does need spacing out it would help. 6 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-18 16:34:00Very good story. xvideo also agree it does need spacing out it would help. I agree needs to be spaced out a bit and proof read your story for grammar and spelling as best you cananonymous readerReport 2012-04-22 21:56:43enjoyed your story. I agree needs to be spaced out a bit and proof read your story for grammar and spelling as best you cananonymous readerReport 2012-04-22 21:56:43enjoyed your story. 6 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-18 16:34:00Very good story. but keep writing!anonymous readerReport 2012-01-01 21:11:26I love it but its kinda hard to read and if you wanna know why read the 1st comment oh BTW i gave it a thumbs up (thats what i call it because thats whats on funnyjunk and youtube)newbagoftoysReport 2011-12-06 23:13:56I like the Ideas, the beginning just
