It could have been a red-hot, sex-filled tale, but the wacky spelling and long, long paragraphs took the wind right out of your story’s sails. 5/10 at bestREADERReport 2006-07-24 01:41:39not too shabby for the first try.spelling & paragraphs sure would make it easier to read. xx video its the first time I write a story so I will fix my mistakes the next time.«12» It could have been a red-hot, sex-filled tale, but the wacky spelling and long, long paragraphs took the wind right out of your story’s sails. can’t wait for part two!READERReport 2006-07-23 15:58:49I aoplogize Im the one who wrote it. its the first time I write a story so I will fix my mistakes the next time.«12»
