to much ‘and then i, and then i, and then i’. xx video you need some character reaction and mindset to make it interesting, not just a series of actions linked by ‘ands’ and commas.READERReport 2004-06-23 19:57:24CAPS ya damn idiot«12» i hear a rewrite in the worksREADERReport 2007-01-09 23:07:07Don’t bother woth [art 3READERReport 2004-08-10 18:16:57all caps are offensive. you need some character reaction and mindset to make it interesting, not just a series of actions linked by ‘ands’ and commas.READERReport 2004-06-23 19:57:24CAPS ya damn idiot«12» you need some character reaction and mindset to make it interesting, not just a series of actions linked by ‘ands’ and commas.READERReport 2004-06-23 19:57:24CAPS ya damn idiot«12» to much ‘and then i, and then i, and then i’. you need some character reaction and mindset to make it interesting, not just a series of actions linked
