=dreamer=«1» When you have this many different characters in one scene, use fewer pronouns so it’s easier to keep track of what’s actually happening. xvideo also if you were to make it a bit longer and add a little discripion to some characters so we can kind of get a feel for them, get to know them a bit :p Great story, Hope to read more!Anonymous readerReport 2009-08-19 06:13:13The plot was interesting, but rushed and convoluted. also if you were to make it a bit longer and add a little discripion to some characters so we can kind of get a feel for them, get to know them a bit :p Great story, Hope to read more!Anonymous readerReport 2009-08-19 06:13:13The plot was interesting, but rushed and convoluted.
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