I give this attempt a 1 out of 10.«12» Dude is MEXICANFbaileyReport 2010-06-16 23:42:35Great story keep it goingThe EditorReport 2010-06-16 19:01:33Sorry, but I couldn’t finish reading this “Supposed” story, it was just to difficult to read and understand. xxx video I give this attempt a 1 out of 10.«12» Before you try again I recommend that you take some creative writing courses. 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2014-10-24 17:25:37I don’t know who’s talking there’s like three or four people talking and I don’t know who’s whoAnonymous readerReport 2010-06-17 08:47:00He even said Yo… Before you try again I recommend that you take some creative writing courses. Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process.
