There were a few things wrong with the grammar/ writing… I am looking forward to seeing more from you so I hope you write more. xvideo There were a few things wrong with the grammar/ writing… There were a few things wrong with the grammar/ writing… I’m afraid that is why your approval score is lower than I expected. 3 comments«1»animal99Report 2013-11-30 15:04:15I had to log in to write this:
I really enjoyed your story. now write a sequel :)anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 01:01:17teri maa ki saale. Good story.. Good story.. There were a few things wrong with the grammar/ writing… I am looking forward to seeing more from you so I hope you write more. You’ve got the story-telling part down (done right) but your mistakes in the sentences kinda threw things off for me.
